About the Book:
Fourteen-year-old Kate Kincaid decides logic and reason are her only defenses when moving in with her lion-taming aunt, her uncle the spy, and her grandmother - a real witch. So when she is sucked through a glowing orange portal contained inside a cardboard box in the attic, Kate relies on her common sense and uncommon wit as she runs for her life through a prison built around familiar fairy tales. Neighborhood trouble-makers Drew, Travis, and Marty Porter join Kate’s reluctant quest through the Realm to find the fabled ‘Sleeping Girl’ who supposedly has the power to send them home. In seeking to understand her new relatives and her place in their weird world, Kate discovers her own truth about family and that Happily Ever After is really just a place to start.
About the Author:
Megan Christopher holds a bachelor's degree in creative writing from the University of California, Riverside, and a Master's in professional writing from USC. In addition to maintaining her own blog, Hollywood Jane, she's written for numerous online publications including Starpulse, Scribophile, Quirk, and All Things Urban Fantasy. She was born, raised, and still lives in West Hollywood, and in her spare time makes art inspired by her favorite geeky fandoms.
These are the first five chapters of a completed manuscript for the first book in what I hope will be a series. It's been through a number of revisions, but given the length, I haven't gotten much feedback, particularly from other writers. I think the beginning is pretty solid; the middle's where I'm less confident, but didn't want to overwhelm potential reviewers with all 75,000 words at once, so I plan to update the manuscript over the next month. I had an agent tell me some areas were over-written, and I agreed, but after a certain point, all the words just blur together. Any notes on where the dialogue or plotting falls flat would also be greatly appreciated, especially if you can suggest a way to remedy it!
Requested feedback Criteria:
Overall Feedback, Voice, Character Development, Pacing, Continuity