Corianne Castle | A working title

By By Caitlin G.

Draft 1 Posted Date: 12/8/2013

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Young Adult Fantasy

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About the Book:

orianne Castle is 16 years old and just got a summer job at the Willy Spurket theme park in the touristy, dilapidated town of South Keys, Florida. Her father vanished, leaving Cori to be raised by her Mother, Susanne—if you could call it raising, anyway. Susanne was what a generous person might call absentminded, but Cori knew the truth. Her mother was crazy. When Corianne gets sucked into the universe of the occult, she sets off on a mission to rescue her mother’s sanity and end non-magical human torture, even if it means tearing down the thin barrier that separates wizards from the rest of the world.

About the Author:

Caitlin lives in Stamford, CT with her boyfriend, no pets, and a very lovely Christmas tree. She enjoys drinking coffee, visiting with friends, and watching terrible horror movies.

Author's Note:

Hello! I've posted the first three chapters of my book about Corianne Castle, a 16 year-old girl who is pulled into another world. This is the first draft, so it still needs a lot of work. I'm basically looking for feedback about the protagonist, and how you feel about her as a main character, whether or not you can relate to her, etc. I'm also interested to see where you see the novel heading and whether or not any of the major plot parts aren't working for you. Thanks for reading!

Requested feedback Criteria: Overall Feedback, Point of View, Voice, Character Development, Plot, Dialogue, Pacing, Setting, Continuity

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