By Elizabeth Whittaker

Draft 5 Posted Date: 12/26/2011

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Paranormal Mystery

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About the Book:

In a land where America is no longer free, common trades such has medical care, herbalism and sports are banned. Yet in the midst of all this, Aviere Mye still carries on her trade: healing the sick and racing her Ferrari in the dead of the night. On one of her runs for supplies, Aviere is confronted with a problem: there are people that are poking around her shop and will do anything to ensure her cooperation, or her silence. Between the cops, leading her gang to victory in her racing and trying to figure out the mystery of unsolved snooping, Aviere has a lot to deal with. But can she balance both of these things and still get to the heart of her problem?

About the Author:

Elizabeth enjoys reading manga, sci-fi, fantasy, drawing, reading, writing and animals. She has three cats and a dog, and lives with her boyfriend.

Author's Note:

This is a WIP and draft three of the story. I am looking for crit on character development, what you do and do not like about story, and what it needs to catch readers attention. I'm also looking for things that can be improved upon with useful feedback. Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy the story.

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