When the Moon Fails | A mystery that spans three countries

By Susan Roebuck

Draft 1 Posted Date: 4/27/2011

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About the Book:

One girl arrives in Portugal on a mission. She's never left the UK before. One man arrives in Portugal on a mission. He's never left the States before. Both are able to help the other, but will they ever meet up or will they live parallel lives?

About the Author:

I live in Portugal and I'm a published author

Author's Note:

I do take note of every critique and I learn from them. Please be honest - I'm a big girl, I can take it! I do have problems with rhythm in sentences and also "Tell vs Show".

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