Through the Holes

By Mary Pascual

Draft 1 Posted Date: 3/15/2016

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Contemporary Fantasy

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About the Book:

Rumors say CeeCee is a bad kid and even she's starting to believe the stories. One wrong decision and she slips through to an unseen world that's wedged in the cracks of our own. Now CeeCee must find a way to escape from a place that doesn't want to let her go. This is a dark ALICE IN WONDERLAND retelling meets NEVERWHERE for YA.

About the Author:

Mary Pascual has a BA in Literature and has had a long career of writing for other people, including stimulating pieces such as marketing datasheets, website copy, high tech FAQs, and training materials. More interestingly, she has written for an online pop culture site writing reviews, making fun of fashion, and interviewing bands, authors, actors, and other successful people. She has also been successful as a lazy blogger for over ten years. Now she is writing for herself and lives in CA with her husband, son, and too many cats, some of which aren't even really hers.

Author's Note:

This is the first five chapters of a novel I'm currently writing. I'm looking for any and all feedback, but especially style changes or changes in narrator voice. I started this book a long time ago, put it down, picked it up again, etc. and I'd like to catch consistency issues. So, if it's starts to sound wonky please let me know. Thanks!

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