By richard keslerwest

Draft 1 Posted Date: 10/29/2013

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About the Book:

If you had a time machine, the first thing you'd do is bring back the most advanced medicine and technology for the benefit of all humanity, right? Well, maybe - after trying to make a quick buck and get your name in lights on a successful movie, perhaps? When Mike Grimlund is at a difficult point in his writing career, his agent Tarek shows up with an unfamiliar screenplay that Mike has already written. It promises to be smash, if the future author can rewrite it before he even gets to write the first draft. But some of the people running the time machine have their own plans for this script - and one of them, Maricela, has to sort out her own feelings about Mike. A surprising time traveler from further in the future tries to help Mike make sense of what is going on around him - but she has her own disturbing revelations about his future.

About the Author:

Richard KeslerWest took his bachelor's in biology and has worked in research, but is completely a layperson when it comes to physics. He lives near Los Angeles, and, in case it's not obvious from the story, likes to ride public transit wherever he travels.

Author's Note:

Thanks to anyone who takes the time to read some or all of this novella (about 45,000 words). I'm mainly interested in two things: 1) How the characters come across - whether they aredistinctive and their actions make sense for them, and 2) how well the description in the story, both of events and of the fictional science, works for you, the reader. But please let me know if you see any other issues with the story, and what you think of the cover.

Requested feedback Criteria: Overall Feedback, Voice, Character Development, Plot, Dialogue, Pacing, Continuity

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