Day on Grassy Hill | a short story

By Criss Cross

Draft 1 Posted Date: 7/28/2011

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Traditional Fantasy

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About the Book:

When Clover looks up for the first time in his life, he sees something magnificent. A spot, bright and warm, yellow and so powerful he has to look away. Amazed, Clover sets out to tell the other cows in his herd about the spot in the sky. But why bother to look up, when they've never needed to before? Clover must be mad, that's the only answer.

About the Author:

Criss Cross makes her living in the visual arts but has a passion for storytelling as well. And yes, her name is Criss, not 'Chris' or 'Christina' etc.

Author's Note:

This is a complete short story. I'd like to get feedback on how to make it more engaging for adults to read. I know the potential is there but for some reason I can't quite hit it on the mark. Thanks all! ~xx

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